Documentary Rough Cut Feedback

We presented the rough cut of our Documentary edit, 'The Escape Movement' to the class while being given recorded feedback from Chris. Although there were still parts of the edit we wanted to improve and alter, we felt we had a rough plot that would work well for the final edit. The comments we received were useful and helpful for us to improve our editing skills and we were told our opening scene of Ady was bold and a good shot; a track up from behind him. However, we began the rough edit with Ady talking about an idea he has but we were told that an audience won't be concentrating within the first few seconds so this would be lost.

We accidentally changed the angle of a shot while Ady was talking so we were told to only do this when he has finished a word or sentence fully. Our title was on screen too long and we were aware of this while exporting the edit, as we had been having major technical problems up until the last morning. Therefore, our title was a rushed decision so that we could present the rough edit with a visual title but need to shorten the duration that it stays on screen for.

Another error we found was Ady's voice talking about his poetry while the scene is showing him reading out another poem, yet he was silent while reading it out loud so that we  could hear his monologue to the interviewer. However, Chris told us this is known as 'fishing' and we were made aware of the way it doesn't look right for the film.

In terms of the approach we struggled to find alternative ways for one as most of the footage we could find focussed mainly on Ady. Although in the feedback session when we were told it's our jobs to find an approach that works best, we struggled a lot to find enough footage to back up an approach that focussed mainly on the poetry club rather than Ady. There would have been enough footage to do this if it was a shorter duration but our task was to create an edit that lasted 5 minutes and we felt that the storyline would be more interesting and engaging to the audience if it focussed on a protagonist.

Our recorded feedback:
https://shuspace.shu.ac.uk/bbcswebdav/pid-5513201-dt-content-rid-9937033_2/courses/55-5431-00S-A-20145/LAEX%20%26%20HEATHER%20MOVEMENT%20FEEDBACK.m4a